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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Fulfillment (04/06/06)

TITLE: A Promise Fulfilled
By Kevin Kindrick


A Promise Fulfilled

A promise was made to me long ago by One who always keeps His word. He said that I would see His Chosen One before I passed.

My name is Simeon.

It was a cold day when I finally saw Him in the flesh. I had felt oddly drawn to the Temple that day, and so I obeyed the tug on my heart.

I entered the Temple and saw a young couple among the crowds bringing their son to be circumcised. Suddenly, it was as if the crowds vanished, and it was just me and this young family.

I knew that this was why the Lord had called me here. I was to greet this family, and His promise would be fulfilled.

At first I hesitated. It had been so long since He had spoken this word to me, I could hardly believe the day finally had come. Then I stepped forward.

I hardly felt the cold stone under my feet as I moved towards them. Before I knew it, I was next to them. With a glance to the mother for permission, I reached out towards the Child. With understanding in her eyes, she handed Him over. As I took Him in my arms, I felt a warmth flow from Him into me that drove out the chill of the day.

There was nothing but Him and me in the world. He looked up at me with knowing eyes – eyes that had seen more than His eight days on this earth could possibly contain.

My spirit was filled with an overflowing joy that had its source in the Child in my arms. Words sprang unbidden to my lips.

“Now Lord, You are releasing Your bond-servant to depart in peace,
According to Your word;
For my eyes have seen Your salvation,
Which You have prepared in the presence of all peoples,
A Light of revelation to the Gentiles,
And the glory of Your people Israel.”

With tears in her eyes, the mother received the Child back into her arms, and continued with her husband to the temple proper.

I dropped to my knees where I stood, and my eyes filled with tears.

Finally, I had seen the salvation of a world.

I had seen the Son of God.

I had seen a promise fulfilled.

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Amy Michelle Wiley 04/13/06
I always especially enjoy Biblical fiction. Good job!
Sally Hanan04/13/06
Even though you have detail in this, it still feels a little cold. I'd like to really feel everything going on in Simeon, see through his eyes, yes, but also touch, think, feel emotionally, smell...
Eg. A look passed between the babe's mother and father. She held him out as one would hold a precious vase, looking deep into my eyes as she searched to see if there was any menace within. The scent of the babe wafted up my nostrils, and as the tenderness of the Almighty filled my soul, I reached out in gratefulness to treasure a minute of holding the Blessed One in my trembling arms.
Marilyn Schnepp 04/14/06
Since this is NOT Biblical fiction - But is TRUE, I suggest you put a footnote as to the Scripture this story comes from: (Luke 2:25)..following your Quotation of what Simeon said. Very well done, a great read, and a moving story that depicts the Topic this week perfectly!
Debora Dyess04/14/06
Such a nice job! I would also like to see a little more detail; did Simeon's artheritia ache as he stepped into the cold temple (and did it abate when he held Jeuss)? Was he a little fearful to take the child in his old hands, or was he aware that at any moment now, with the promise fulfille, he may die, perhaps even in the Temple right then? Also, I assume you phrased Simeon's prayer the way you did because that's the way it appears in the Bible but if a non-Christain was to read this it may be a little distracting for it to appear 'chopped up' (a nonChristian friend of mine read a piece I wrote with Bibleical text and made that comment to me--thought I'd pass it on). Overall, good read!
Jan Ackerson 04/14/06
I especially like the way that things focused for Simeon--the vanishing crowds, "it was just Him and me..." That made the character very real to me.
Beth Muehlhausen04/17/06
A promise fulfilled - wow! Good story for the topic, for sure.