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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Lock (03/06/06)

TITLE: Freefalling
By Teri Wilson
03/10/06


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The angry edge of the razor saws back and forth, severing and slicing. Suddenly, I am free. I feel myself falling and floating through the air. I am just a simple lock of hair.

I begin my dive downward, twisting and turning. The wind rushing past me carries the haughty laughs of the barber and a womanís anticipation. My brother and sister tresses tumble around me. We fall through the air like heavy raindrops from a thick black cloud of deceit. Seven braids in all.

We are not the only things being cruelly released from the sleeping manís head. The shiny blade also cuts away power, strength and blessing. A lifetime vow is sheared off and falls beside me.

But, I am just a simple lock of hair. I fall downward from Samsonís brow toward Delilahís lap. As I land gently on the smooth fabric of her robes, the tear falling from my Fatherís eye lands on the ground with a splash.


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Sharon Singley03/13/06
very interesting take on the word 'lock'.
Amy Michelle Wiley 03/14/06
Oooo, very clever. I think it would have been even cooler if you had not said any names, but let the reader figure it out on their own. Well done!
Lynda Schultz 03/15/06
Not such a simple lock of hair after all. Good job, and in so few words too! Congratulations.
Marilyn Schnepp 03/16/06
Where are all the Commentators? No challenge to write this week - they should be out in droves commenting on these great articles this week! This one is exceptional! Short! Great idea! Great title! So well written and my only suggestion - Footnote a Scripture from whence this was taken. Super take on Topic...and brilliantly done!
Virginia Gorg03/16/06
For a short article, this says a lot. I agree - leave out names, but add a Scripture reference. Very nicely done - it locked up my attention :)
Pat Guy 03/16/06
Yes! Very creative take on 'Lock.' And good job of it too! Good strong entry for your first time in level 3 - really, really good!
Jan Ackerson 03/16/06
I like your use of alliteration: severing and slicing, falling and floating, twisting and turning. Wish more people would pay attention to choosing just the right words!
Jessica Schmit03/16/06
Wow! This was fantastic!
Helen Paynter03/17/06
Lovely writing, and because it was so short it was very tantalising. I agree - leave ou the names, tantalise us into working it out, and give a Bible ref for those who can't decode it or who want to re-read it.
Shari Armstrong 03/17/06
Very creative...well done
Mary Alice Bowles03/19/06
A very good write from the first to the last word.
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