The Official Writing Challenge
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03/13/06
I liked the structure - made it a lot easier to read. I liked what you were trying to accomplish as well - for the most part, you were successful. Some good food for thought here, thanks for posting it.

Only quibble might be the inconsistency in capitalizing Me/My when talking as God. Not sure there is a rule regarding capitalization in the first place, actually....I wonder who started doing that?

Thanks again for posting. A good read.
03/15/06
Wow, I really like this. The approach is different. Powerful imagines that the reader can identify with, once, twice, three times (maybe not the fourth quite yet!). I loved this line especially: "I had to turn My back on Him so I wouldn’t have to turn my back on you." Good stuff, great message.
03/16/06
I found this beautiful, heart-breaking, and extremely moving. Your character is so real and so human, but with such awesome faith. One of my all-time favorites.
Pat Guy  
03/16/06
A Masterpiece! Thank you!
03/16/06
Wow, so much to this story. It's truly beautiful.
03/16/06
Yes, I really liked this. My only quibble was theological - in 2nd (main) paragrapg, Gd describes himself as grateful. Not sure that is quite the right word. But..small quibble, great piece.
03/17/06
Some great lessons packed in here. Well done.
03/19/06
Beautiful - just beautiful!
03/20/06
Creative spin on the topic - nicely done, Ben! Good message for all of us - to sell out to God and not sweat the circumstances. Congrats on placing w/ this!! :-)
03/20/06
Great writing! Congrats on your win! Kate~