The Official Writing Challenge
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03/13/06
Lots of ideas here. Kinda leaves the reader hanging at the end. Would have been nice if you could have tied it back into the OCD concept at the end somehow - to bring it full circle and make more of a complete piece. As it is, it reads like a slice of a much larger piece.

You made some good word choices, and you write with a good level of confidence. Keep at it, please. Thanks for posting.
Interesting take on the topic. I appreciated your views.
03/16/06
Sorry, I'm going to be a bit critical on factual grounds. If you are going to use a medical analogy, you need to get it right. Mental handicap is not being 'over the edge mentally'. It does not equate to mental illness. I also thought the way you referred to OCD at the beginning seemed a bit callous. Sorry to be critical of what was otherwise a very interesting piece.