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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Enter (02/27/06)

TITLE: Door of No Words
By Pat Guy
03/06/06


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A child sits, legs crossed, behind the rustle of her peers,
aware there is no one but her.
They, and she are gathered in a room
by the window in her house.
Her chin rests on the knuckles of her fists.
A stranger stands and begins.

A tapestry is woven before their eyes,
of Words she has heard many times. Of Words
she hears for the first time. The Spirit reveals …
the consequences for all mankind and
the fault lay not only with her.
And the messenger continues to speak.

With perfect strokes the Spirit weaves, pure threads
of red and gold, into Redemption’s story;
the promise of rescue and Glory. Clear eyes are opened.
Jesus is standing at the door of her heart,
knocking … gently. She does not want to wait!
And the lady asks them to raise their hands.

Moments are passing! The Spirit hovers … ready!
His stillness speaks no words.
Jesus is knocking – now! She cannot wait
and she opens the door of her heart. Jesus enters,
and turns to shut the door; her 6 yr. old soul is sealed.
Then her Mom tells everyone it’s time for snacks.

And Jesus goes with her … and never leaves.























*Author’s note: My mother had a Good News Club for children once a week in our home when we lived on an Air Force Base in Nebraska. Bases are full of children. Good News Clubs are a Missionary Outreach, usually of a church, and someone from that church comes to give the lessons.


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Laurie Glass03/06/06
How creative. This piece had a nice flow to it and I think is one that you read once and something hits you and when you read it again, you get even more out of it. Beautiful.
Amanda D'costa03/07/06
A nice poem and a good write.
Cheryl Harrison 03/08/06
This is beautiful. I had to read it twice before the meaning came clear, but I loved it, especially these words...

"Moments are passing! The Spirit hovers … ready!
His stillness speaks no words.
Jesus is knocking – now! She cannot wait
and she opens the door of her heart. Jesus enters,..."


Very creative setting for the topic...a Bible study for children. I enjoyed reading your poem.
Andre Kingston03/10/06
I love your small details - threads of red and gold. I find this poem well done with content and images. Stanza breaking is well timed. These things add strength the encompassing story being told. I love how you 'weave' the speaker as a mix of a magician and a weaver. I love the ending line - and he never leaves her! Well done.

Your line breaking in the second stanza was a little weird. It felt like you typed it on a shorter column and forgot to hit enter in the right spot a few times. Not too bad, just felt a bit off.

Thank you for the charming story.
terri tiffany03/10/06
Beautiful! This has more meaning for me cause my own daughter was saved at a sitter's home who had a woman come in with the Good News...she was about that age too. Loved the ending most.
Caitlynn Lowe03/10/06
Very nice little story! I especially loved the part that said, "With perfect strokes the Spirit weaves, pure threads / of red and gold, into Redemption’s story"

Wonderful!
Jan Ackerson 03/10/06
Pat, you took me back to my own childhood, when I attended just such a Bible club! Wonderful! Love the way you presented this!
Carla Feagans03/11/06
Very good writing. I love the story you are telling as well as the unique way you presented it. MANY great descriptions, including "the rustle of her peers", "on the knuckles of her fists", and I especially love "of Words she has heard many times. Of Words
she hears for the first time. The Spirit reveals …"

Very good job!
Linda Watson Owen03/11/06
Yes, you've taken me too, Pat, to a place in my childhood where I can still see the faces of teachers who are forever sealed in my memory. Such gifts from God! I knelt at the age of nine at our church altar and accepted Jesus as my Savior because precious, caring people were faithful to God's calling. Thank you, dear poet friend for this special work!
T. F. Chezum03/12/06
Very good. I too remembered my childhood and the good news club. Thank you.
Amy Michelle Wiley 03/12/06
Cute poem! I have been to a Good News Club, too. Good job.
Suzanne R03/12/06
This is so tender and lovely ... well done!
Kate Wells03/14/06
Ohhh, Pat.. this was so wonderful. It brought tears to my eyes and gave me chills. I taught in Christian preschool for 8 years.. and still have my visual with Jesus knocking on the door.
I cannot tell you how much I enjoyed this. My very favorite line was;
"Then her Mom tells everyone it’s time for snacks.

And Jesus goes with her … and never leaves."
Loved it, loved it, loved it!
Kate~
Sally Hanan03/16/06
This was the entry that won top marks in every section from me. It was simple, yet striking, yet masterful.
Beth Muehlhausen03/19/06
First reaction: sweet. Second reaction: powerful. Now how many time do those go hand-in-hand? Nicely done, Pat. I was 26 when I accepted Christ, and yet....surely there was a childlike heart in me responding to the Call.