The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked this story. Since I was that girl only seven years ago, I think this article was written very realistically and is a fun piece to read. A nice break from the sin, turmoil and death that usually accommodates the majority of the articles in the challenge. I noticed that you had a few minor mistakes, but none that took away from the story. I loved the line about Mark saying "had her hair done up in some fancy way." (or something like that.) It's a definite "man" thing to say! All in all, great job.
03/09/06
cute and sweet.