The Official Writing Challenge
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03/08/06
Good capture of peer pressure. You have the feelings and, well, the "pressure" do very nicely. This should be part of a longer work.... if it isn't already. :-) I'd like you to watch out for your alliteration issues. No sense detracting from a great story with little glitches. Great job!
03/09/06
Good story! I'd read it at a campfire to my Missionettes.

Good writing and a good lesson. I could see this as an illustration for a Sunday School lesson. Good job.
03/10/06
Well done, and you do a great job with dialog. A compelling read, should be shared with jr. hi youth groups.
03/10/06
Well written. A much needed lesson told in a palatable story. Yeggy
03/15/06
Perfect for a young teens type publication! But lessons are plenty for we 'bigger' people too. I love the title. The whole piece is great.

I write this comment having just got in from the movies myself with a friend ... only the popcorn and subject matter were both good!
I agree - this could be a great story for a jr. high youth group or Sunday School class. Plenty of good discussion options!!!

Kids don't realize (or want to admit) how powerful the mind really is. There need to be more stories like this, and they need to be shared. :-)