The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow - this is awesome! I was glued to the screen all the way through. I think we can all see ourselves in Brittney's shoes. And I loved the part about the tears.
Oh my! What a picture! I can feel the spirit move me even as i think about this piece.
Thank you for writing it.
I would place it high in the standings, and I will recommend it to others.

Wow! By far one of the best I have read in a long time. Your descriptions are absolutely breathtaking. This is brilliantly written with a very clear message. You are a gifted writer. Keep up the good work!
Very nice! I especially the tears that were transformed into jewels and then gathered. Great conclusion.
Wonderful! I love the bit about the tears. Very lovely.
Goes with the title but I loved that of all the things she could have asked for, it was a heart like the Lord's that she chose, and that the door she headed for was holiness. May that be true of all who name the Name of Christ. Good job.
You sure picked a good verse! ;) You did a really good job Beth! A really good job. Great elements, emotion, message - just so much! Keep on goin' dear friend!
I especially loved the conclusion - putting her revived heart into action. The whole thing is just a beautiful picture. Well done!
I loved reading this. I was engrossed the whole way through it. I absolutely loved the descriptions of the "door to the heart" with its vines and so on. Great job and wonderful detail.

I however wanted to hear about her reason for coming sooner, like about the time she fell to her knees. I think a line about fingering her wedding band was best there or maybe thoughts of her husband's anger, betrayal or whatever most appropriate to the separation mentioned.

I loved the tears to gems to make us grow concept. It was really original and good.

Thank you.