The Official Writing Challenge
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03/07/06
Yup.
I had forgotten to ask to enter. Knock and the door shall be opened. The answer was simplicity itself.
Thanks for the message.
03/09/06
The reclining chair next to me which up until now had been emptied was suddenly filled the presence of a thin, frail looking woman.

First off, I loved the story, have spent many nights in the hospital with my daughter when she had ADEM. I could see it all the way you described things. Jut thought this sentance was ackward because if the person was thin, and frail. . .how could they fill a chair. I'd make a suggestion on how to fix this, but that would be a mistake you'll have to email me for. Good Job!
03/09/06
Good job with the writing and with a message that we all need to be reminded of constantly.
03/11/06
Good stroy. Great emotion. Thanks for submitting this. Ya done good.
03/11/06
I thought about what I said a little more and wanted to add that I'm not even sure what I pointed out needs fixing. Perhaps it's such a common way to say this that it really doesn't matter. :) Anyhooo, kudos on a job well done.