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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Selfishness (02/14/05)

TITLE: THE BATTLE FOR "ME"
By Dennis Van Scoy
02/16/05


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In the village of “Me” on a dreary, damp day,
the work of recovery gets under way.
The tentacled beast that launched the attack,
has returned to it’s lair…yet is feared to be back.
Terrified, the inhabitants go to their knees,
and beg their Champion to enter the trees;
‘cause they know for certain the beast is hid,
in the thick, darkened forest known as “the id”.

Clad in full armor,…. with sword in hand,
the Warrior’s commissioned to free up this land.
He lights the dark places and drives out all woes,
Spreading Sonlight wherever He goes.
And as this Champion walks through the trees,
the dreary dampness gives way to warm breeze.
At last once again all clouds disappear,
as the fresh air of “hope” begins to draw near.

Soon the Hero confronts this foe,
who’s been confessed and has no where to go.
It’s long sharp tentacles that caused such great pain,
now tremble with fear for it’s soon to be slain.
The Champion / Warrior then raises His sword,
it’s double-edged blade proclaims He is Lord;
and with one mighty blow He at last ends the reign,
of the monster called “self” who once ruled this plain.

So in your subconscious forest called “id”,
this terror of selfishness might also be hid;
confess it’s presence….give it no where to go,
and allow God’s Spirit to deal it death’s blow.
The Sonlight comes in through the rule of God’s Word,
seen in our actions, not just what is heard,
Friend this is urgent,….make no mistake…
we must reflect Jesus in each move that we make!


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Melanie Kerr 02/22/05
I ilke the idea of "me" rperesenting a village terrorized by the beast of selfishness. I enjoyed the structure and the rythmn of your poem. I am not sure whether many people understand the term "id" as it is very scecialsed vocabulary.
Karen Deikun02/23/05
Very ingenious and well written, containing good imagery. The spiritual battle is always underway and we are often unaware. Excellent and poetically perfect!
Judy Anderson02/24/05
This poem took some hard work and thought. Our spiritual warfare takes places within doesn't it? thanks for a great entry!
Karen Treharne02/24/05
Wonderfully written and thought provoking. A great entry that flowed with rhythm and vivid imagery. God bless you, ladybug Karen
donna robinson02/24/05
great sharp lines that called for a reading in a bold voice! I found myself battling with the Sonlight and rejoiced with the slaying of self! The ending was dynamite, just a great read.
Phyllis Inniss 02/25/05
The warfare between self and centering on Jesus was magnificently captured in your poem. Eclipsing self is sometimes a slow process but the Hero comes to save.
Judith Gayle Smith07/30/13
Imaginative and powerful! Love this . . .