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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Selfishness (02/14/05)

TITLE: Eve, Guilty as Charged
By Melanie Kerr
02/15/05


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Eve, I have reached my decision
God’s right, you are guilty of sin
But not for the bite of the apple
I can understand why you gave in

The serpent had truly confused you
Undermining the truth you had known
Eroding the things you weren’t sure of
Like a dog that is gnawing a bone

The fruit held such promise of knowledge
“Eat it, like God, you’ll become.
“Die? Never!” promised the serpent
To his lies you began to succumb

Was it sweet on the tongue or quite bitter?
Disobedience staining your heart?
When did you start to acknowledge
That your world was tearing apart?

Innocence vanished so quickly
You’d moved to the enemy’s side
Your friendship with God was now shattered
You were lost, with nowhere to hide

Your next act really condemns you
A selfish and terrible thing
You offered the fruit to your husband
Knowing the hurt it would bring

You knew you had lost your position
That peace in your life was no more
But Adam’s heart was unsullied
A truth that you chose to ignore

Where was the love you had nurtured
As you held out the fruit in your hand
Watching his face as you severed
This man from the future God planned?

Why were your actions so selfish?
Was a river of fear flooding through?
Did you think that you would feel better
If Adam had disobeyed too?

I know that Adam’s responsible
That he had his own part to play
Turning his back on his Father
He made his own choice that day

Like a stone that’s dropped in the water
The ripples extend far and wide
Your actions closed Eden forever
Leaving us shivering outside

Hope is not lost. There’s an answer
Another showed true selfless love
His sacrifice opened a doorway
To the heavenlies with God above.

As I think and reflect on your actions
Would I have done just the same?
My actions have caused hurt to others
I really have no one to blame.


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Phyllis Inniss 02/23/05
I can't believe no one has yet commnted on this beautiful poem with its alternate rhyming scheme. You have shown how Eve's disobedience lured Adam into disobeying as well. He however was not blameless and left us cold outside.
Karen Treharne02/24/05
I agree with Phyllis, this is a wonderful poem, well-written and honest. Others who read this will be bless, whether they can take time to comment or not. Yours in Christ, ladybug Karen
Marjorie Arrowood02/25/05
I didn't submit to this challenge and today is the first day I've taken time to read. This is wonderful, but in content and technique! (My past attempts at poetry have been awful and I envy those of you with the gift!)
Marjorie Arrowood02/25/05
Oops -- that should say both in content and technique! Trust me -- I'm blushing!
Sally Hanan02/25/05
This is wonderful. Beautifully put and you managed to get it all to rhyme too!
Scott Hesch02/26/05
WOW! God has truly blessed you with poetry. it is awesome. Godbless.
P.S.-dont let this get to your head, it is God doing this work inside you : )