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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: End (02/13/06)

TITLE: I See Dead People
By Sally Hanan
02/19/06


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Verse
You look as I pass by.
You know my name
and I know why.
Iíve heard you think Iím cute.
You stare at me,
act like a mute.

But I see things in you
that Iím not the answer to.

Chorus
You stand there in that body,
I see through your disguise -
I can see dead people
and I see death in your eyes.
My life wonít end your death.
I cannot live for you.
I pray that you choose life,
but I wonít be your glue.

Verse
You wait when school gets out.
You watch Ďtil Iím
long out of sight.
You think I have it all -
all that you need
to come alive.

Youíre so dang wrong.
Iím no divinity.

Chorus
You stand there in that body,
I see through your disguise -
I can see dead people
and I see death in your eyes.
My life wonít end your death.
I cannot live for you.
I pray that you choose life,
but I wonít be your glue.

Bridge
Look above,
let truth come in.
Let light blast through the darkness.
Give up the ashes -
Heíll breathe,
Heíll breathe on the embers.

Chorus
You stand there in that body,
I see through your disguise -
I can see dead people
and I see death in your eyes.
My life wonít end your death.
I cannot live for you.
I pray that you choose life,
but I wonít be your glue.

I pray youíll live for you.

See yourself as He sees you.


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Anita Neuman02/20/06
I'd love to hear the tune & accompaniment! I really like the line in the chorus: "My life won't end your death". Great tie to the topic.
Pat Guy 02/20/06
Great song! I'd love to hear the tune! Good words!
Shari Armstrong 02/23/06
Very creative - do you already have this set to music?
janet rubin02/23/06
Cool entry! Glad you took the risk and did something different. Great message too.
Jan Ackerson 02/23/06
One of the more creative entries that I've seen here. Good job!
Garnet Miller 02/23/06
Great lyrics!
Lynda Schultz 02/23/06
I need the music (but I trust that it's as good as the message) to fully appreciate this. But what struck me was the "boundary" established - that you wouldn't, and couldn't be, the answer to this other person's problem. Good job.
Dara Sorensen02/23/06
I too would love to hear the music that goes with this! Powerful lyrics!
Linda Watson Owen02/23/06
Yes, this is a powerful and needed message set in contemporary song form. So well done! Great job!
Chris Clement02/24/06
Great lyrics!
Maxx .02/24/06
Wow ... I really wish that I could hear the music. I bet it is a masterpiece. The lyrics are powerful. Good work!
Julianne Jones02/25/06
I don't need to hear the music (though that would be great) to know that this is a special entry. I just love the reference to the dead people in his eyes and the picture it conjures. Hope to see more lyrics in the future. This was excellent!
Lynda Lee Schab 02/25/06
Wow! Something new from you, Sally. I loved it! Wonderful lyrics, powerful message. This has it all. Keep 'em coming!
Beth Muehlhausen02/27/06
Wow - how do you do it?! This is really cool! I know a very talented woman who writes music but is on the lookout for lyrics....I should pair you guys up. :-)