The Official Writing Challenge
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Amen, and Amen. What a poignant message - and so simply put. I love the use of Scripture, God's very words. Thank you for sharing.

God bless,

Kevin
02/23/06
Very lovely and full of reassurance. I wonder if, for the sake of the challenge, you might paraphrase the Lord's words to you, and then cite them at the end. That way we can enjoy more of your own voice, too. You're a good writer!
02/23/06
Jan took what I was going to say! We feel this character's pain because we've all been there - but you need to make us feel it simply because of how you've written it. I would suggest using more of your word count to elaborate on what she's going through and just have snippets of God's voice encouraging her along the way.
02/25/06
Nicely done, but I would have liked to have seen more of your own writing within the scripture :)