The Official Writing Challenge
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This sounds like the basis for a longer story. Needed some more editing. Something I learned this past year- write out numbers (i.e. "twenty-eight", not "28"). You have a good idea here- keep working on it.
Yikes, you really left your readers with lots of questions here! Why was she killed? By whom? How did that person get retribution? It's okay to leave readers dangling on one question, but...perhaps that was your intent? At any rate, good writing skills, and keep it up.
Leaves many unanswered questions. You said "the person" and then "their garage" - was there more than one person? Was the person her boyfriend? Hmmmmmm...