The Official Writing Challenge
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02/21/05
I thought your short story at the beginning highlighted the issue of selfishness well. Amy was so focussed on herslef that she did not see she was behaving just as badly as the small boy. I wish Tanya had said something rather than just put up with it.
02/21/05
I like the little verse at the end. Amy should have read or heard it. Quite right she was behaving just like the little spoilt brat. You brought out the idea of selfishness very well in your story.
I liked the story but felt there was a separation from the story to the ending. I would have liked to see the thoughts more woven together, if that makes any sense? I really liked her friend!!