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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Space (01/23/06)

TITLE: Can You Hear Me Now?
By Kenn Allan


The salesman slid it from the box,
And placed it in my hand,
He said, "This mobile telephone,
Is our most expensive brand."

"But listen to these features,
This little gem includes,
It's sure to raise your status,
From the power it exudes."

From satellite, both day and night,
We’ll bounce your every word,
We’ll screen your calls, check your mail,
And pay all fees incurred.”

“Six-way calling, Internet,
Fax capability,
And if the line is busy,
It will brew a cup of tea.”

“I’ll take it!” cried my foolish tongue,
“Please hold that phone for me,
I have to go and hock my car—
I should be back by three.”

That evening, in the twilight’s gleam,
My new phone at my side,
I sat upon my front porch steps,
And read the Owner’s Guide.

“To fully charge your phone,” it read,
“Just plug it in the wall,
But always disconnect it,
If you want to make a call.”

I must have been preoccupied,
O'er the thrill which lie ahead,
I didn't see the LEDs,
Flashing bright from green to red.

I dialed with trembling fingers,
Pushed the button labeled "SEND,"
I'm not quite sure what happened—
It was hard to comprehend.

My phone which I'd mistakenly,
Left plugged firmly in the wall,
Began to shiver, shriek and spit,
(Earl Grey, if I recall).

The overload within that box,
Surged up my quaking arm,
Reducing it to energy,
Without apparent harm.

The rest of me transmuted,
In the twinkling of an eye,
And when my frequency was clear,
I transmitted towards the sky!

Faster, faster, faster still,
I shot into the black,
And passed the promised satellite,
Instead of bouncing back.

I hit the veil which separates,
The realm of God and men,
With speed so great, I tore right through,
Then picked up speed again.

Surrounding me were children's prayers,
En route on wings of doves,
I sailed through streams of broken tears,
Shed for departed loves.

I heard the whispers angels speak,
When aiding those on earth,
I watched souls heading up in death,
And heading down for birth.

But even these I left behind,
Upon my wayward flight,
‘Till nothing else was seen or heard,
Except a distant light.

When all at once, a hand came forth,
And scooped me in its palm,
It gently turned my course around,
And quenched my fear with calm.

“You must go back,” I heard a voice,
Somewhere within my head,
Then felt a shove from up above—
I woke up in my bed!

It felt so good to be alive!
I sang and praised the Lord!
Oh. Then I bought a brand new phone—
One tethered by a cord!

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Kristin Slavik01/31/06
This poem was fun! I liked the way to held to the story without making it sound contrived like rhyming sometimes does. Good Entry!
Amy Michelle Wiley 01/31/06
That was HILARIOUS!!!! The title caught my eye and I was not dissapointed. LOL
Linda Watson Owen01/31/06
What a fun, entertaining poem! I tell ya, those cell phones can be a trip! Haha! Great job!
Teri Wilson02/02/06
Loved it! Very clever.
Debbie Sickler02/02/06
I loved this and the timing of reading it made it even better. My husband and I have been searching the net the last few nights trying to find the best new cell phone packages. What a nightmare! I can totally relate to wanting the best features, yet finding cell phones to be carried away (loved the idea of a phone making tea! I'd buy it! hehe)

Great work with turning such a fun and unique idea into a well written and entertaining poem. Hope you place well!

PS - I plan to share this with my husband when he comes home from work. I'm sure he'll enjoy it too!
Shari Armstrong 02/02/06
That was a riot! What a wonderful flight lf fancy :)
James Clem 02/02/06
Very enjoyable! This was fun! Could be a winner!
Corinne Smelker 02/02/06
This was very funny - I am always in awe of those who can write poetry well, and this was well written.
Jan Ackerson 02/02/06
This is wonderful! Your fourth stanza cracked me up.
Stevie McHugh02/02/06
One of the most clever poems I've ever read. You definitely have a gift!
Lynda Lee Schab 02/02/06
Too funny! You know, I wouldn't really be surprised if they start making cell phones that do brew a cup of tea. If it brewed coffee, I'd snap it up in a second!
Great humor, great fun. Well done!
Blessings, Lynda
Joe Moreland02/02/06
This WAS hilarious! I love the pace and the rhythm. It does take a certain type of talent to write this kind of poem, kind of half poet/half comedian, I think. My favorite line was "And passed the promised satellite, instead of bouncing back". I had to read it twice because it interrupted the pace I was reading at by making me spit laughter all over my screen. :>)
Garnet Miller 02/02/06
How funny!! My cell phone frustrates me quite a lot. It's never beamed me into the far reaches of space and reality, but I've felt like sending it down to the terra firma many times!!!
Cheryl Harrison02/02/06
I am still laughing... This is a really cute poem. I especially liked...

"And if the line is busy,
It will brew a cup of tea.”

Keep up the good work!
Maxx .02/02/06
lol! What else can I say? Funny!
Pat Guy 02/03/06
I think this is a masterpiece of humor, wit and poetry. A delight that tickles the fancy of the reader!
T. F. Chezum02/03/06
That was great! Very funny.
janet rubin02/04/06
I'm just picking out a few entries to read this week. SOOOOO glad I clicked on this one. Fun, fun, fun.
The Tornyn02/05/06
I love this! It has everything. Humor, cell phones, and a little touch of heaven!! Great job!
Cassie Memmer02/06/06
GREAT! I certainly enjoyed this! CONGRATULATIONS!
Anita Neuman02/06/06
Super, wonderful, fantastic, hilarious! A well-deserved placement in EC. Way to go!!!
Sally Hanan02/06/06
Too funny. I'd sign up too if it made coffee.
Sue Goodreau02/06/06
This poem is really good! It's well-written, creative, funny (I love the part about the Earl Grey tea!), and flows very nicely. I hope you will write more pieces like this. Congrats on your win, and keep up the good work!
Debbie OConnor02/07/06
Delightful, silly...you have a wonderful gift for telling poetic stories. I'm a decided fan! :)
Joanne Malley02/07/06
So original and lots of fun! Congratulations...well done!
Julianne Jones02/08/06
Oh, this was wonderful. I needed a good laugh. Congrats on a well-deserved win.