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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Space (01/23/06)

TITLE: Personal Space
By Melanie Kerr
01/26/06


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This is my personal space
Hand made to fit my specifications
Carved out carefully from birth
I've named it and claimed it and
Entrance is by invitation only

This is my personal space
If I can touch you with my outstretched finger
If I can hear your whisper in my ear
If I can feel your breathe on my face
You are too close
You have perpetrated an act of war
And I entreat you to withdraw

This is my personal space
I am the ruler of this domain
I hold all rights to access
There are no public pathways
No ramblers, hikers or tourists
Be warned
Trespassers will be evicted.

This is my personal space
Every thought, every opinion
Carefully nurtured and protected
Every action, every reaction
Carefully weighed and measured
Permission will not be granted
To land your ideas
On the runway of my mind

This is my personal space
Smoke detectors are fitted with new batteries
Infra red lines crisscross my heart
The number to deactivate the alarm
Is well hidden and concealed
There's barbed wire
And glass shards
On top of all my walls
And the sound of barking is real

This is my personal space
And as I stand alone
I wonder
Why am I so alone?


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Sally Hanan01/31/06
Good job on this one. Sounds like you've been in that place yourself once or twice.
Linda Watson Owen01/31/06
Intriguing free verse poem! 'Permission will not be granted to land your ideas on the runway of my mind,' Love that image! The outstretched measuring arm and finger early in the poem sets the tone throughout. I really enjoyed reading this!
Lynda Schultz 02/02/06
Wonderful. I'm picky about my poetry, and this one really grabbed me. Good job.
Anita Neuman02/06/06
A great take on the topic, brilliantly worded, and a poignant message. Fabulous!
Debbie OConnor02/07/06
Great message!
Joanne Malley02/07/06
I'm sure this poem reflects the feelings of many. Good job!
Crista Darr02/08/06
Wow, this is so good. Excellent work, Melanie.