The Official Writing Challenge
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I love the contrast of city to nature, losing self in Gods creation! In oregon we also live close to city, hills, and beach.

The scriptures keep story from progressing to an epiphany or climax that might grow, stem from the previous.

Though it was a Bible study,i wanted to see the story end with a crises or epiphany birthed from previous action.

Example: 'when i hit the beach last Friday, the crashing white froth waves carried a presence reminded me of God's might. I felt protected, shielded from the storm.
I love the contrast of city to nature, losing self in Gods creation! In oregon we also live close to city, hills, and beach.

The scriptures keep story from progressing to an epiphany or climax that might grow, stem from the previous.

Though it was a Bible study,i wanted to see the story end with a crises or epiphany birthed from previous action.

Example: 'when i hit the beach last Friday, the crashing white froth waves carried a presence reminded me of God's might. I felt protected, shielded from the storm.
09/05/19
I suggest putting the scripture reference addresses as a footnote because the detract from the flow of the story. The dialogue is close to being natural. Good job on a difficult assignment.
A nice little vignette of a peak into a conversation. It's awesome that we can retreat to God anywhere we are!
09/10/19
I love the scriptures and the message in your entry. I enjoyed it very much, thank you.
BLessings~
09/12/19
I think you nicely captured the essence of a couple of new friends getting to know each other. I easily visualized each of the settings. Nice work!