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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Start (01/16/06)

TITLE: Lookin' For Emmett Hayes
By Shannon Redmon
01/22/06


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The smell of axle grease and kerosene filled Emmett’s nose as he shuffled into the garage and through the maze of car parts. His eyes stopped on the calendar beauty. Not the buxom blonde draped across the hood, but the 1966 Chevy Supersport decorating the wall.

“If I wasn’t sure of your love for me, I might get jealous of that old calendar.”

Emmett jumped around at the sound of his wife’s voice. She was still the most beautiful thing God had ever given him.

“You know it’s all about the cars, babe.”

“Of course I do because if it wasn’t…I’d have to kill ya!” The humor in her eyes made him laugh.

“So what can I do for the love of my life?”

“The pastor called again. He has another one.”

“When will he be here?”

“Sometime this afternoon.”

“Okay, I’ll be ready.”

Emmett had barely finished lunch when the bark of his dogs alerted him to the arrival of a stranger. He turned to see a young man no more than sixteen emerge from an old car. His clothing of torn jeans and a dirty shirt, matched his hairstyle, unmanaged and disheveled.

“Excuse me sir, I’m looking for Emmett Hayes.”

“You found ‘im.” Emmett slid back underneath his car to tighten a bolt with his ratchet. His visitor squatted down for a closer look.

“Pastor Jim says I can work for you to earn a room and some food.”

“Yep.”

“So…should I take my things inside?”

The tires on the dolly scraped the concrete as Emmett slid into the daylight and looked at the boy’s face for the first time. He had deep set eyes with lashes that could have touched his forehead. Emmett supposed if his daughter were home she’d be swooning.

“Nope.”

“What do ya mean, nope?”

“Your place is above the garage and I got a few rules.”

Emmett followed his gaze to the apartment window.

“You work from dawn till dark, Monday through Saturday. On Sunday’s you go to church with us in the morning and then you have the afternoon and evenin’ free. You get breakfast, lunch and dinner from my sweet Anna and you treat her with respect…yes, Mam and no, Mam. Got that?”

“Yes sir. Should I get started now?”

“Right after you get a haircut. Anna’s waiting on ya.” Emmett nodded toward the back porch where Anna stood behind a chair with her scissors. Disappointment crossed the young man’s face.

“Do I have to cut my hair?”

“At least enough to show your eyes…so I can tell if you’re honest.”

Emmett watched as the boy shifted from one foot to the other like a scale weighing choices and then turned toward the porch. At least the kid liked cars, a little too much Pastor Jim said. His first offense of grand larceny bought him two years of house arrest and community service at Emmett’s garage.

“One more thing boy…what’s yer name?”

“Clyde sir, my name is Clyde Fisher…and what’s her name?” He pointed to the primered body of the 1966 Chevelle.

“Her name is Roxie.”

Emmett slid back under his car and mumbled a prayer.

“Seems like he might be a good’un after some hard work. Help me lead him to You, Lord.

Clyde proved his loyalty and good heart to Emmett over the next couple of years as they worked on Roxie together. Jesus became the topic of choice underneath that old hood and Emmett knew his dream would have to wait a little longer.

“Well today’s the day!” Emmett tossed the keys to Clyde.

“You want me to start her up?”

“Yeah…since she’s your car.”

“No way! You’re given her to me?”

“Yep.”

“I can’t take her. You’ve dreamed about having a car like this one.”

“Well, I get my love out of fixin’ them up and it’s Ol’ Susie’s turn back there. Besides you need something to drive at college.”

Clyde wiped his eyes and turned the key.

“Nobody’s every done anything like this for me. How will I ever repay you?”

“How ‘bout doin’ good in school and stayin’ outta trouble? Now, go get your bags packed. Anna and I want to drive you to the campus this evening and get you settled.”

Emmett watched as Clyde climbed the stairs to his apartment when the dogs started barking at a rusted old car pulling in the drive. A young boy with cut-off shorts and a pony tail emerged.

“Excuse me sir, I’m lookin’ for Emmett Hayes.”


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Crista Darr01/23/06
Great story! Excellent dialogue. I wish ministry would always have this kind of success.
Marilyn Schnepp 01/26/06
Great story, great dialogue and great message of hope! I was right there with you from Start to Finish! And, the last line tells it all! "Lookin' for Emmett Hayes" - Great Job! Well done and God Bless...
Lynda Schultz 01/26/06
We can't minister to the whole world all at once, but we can do it one person at a time. Wonderfully written reminder.
Candice Kettell01/26/06
I fell in love with your character! I would love to meet an Emmett Hayes. A real joy to read.
T. F. Chezum01/27/06
Good story, nicely written.
Cassie Memmer01/27/06
Wonderful story! This mc is fulfilling his godly mission. Great writing. I enjoyed it!
Jan Ackerson 01/27/06
Very good! Lovable characters and good development, not easy to do in so few words.
Alexandra Wilkin01/27/06
Liked this one a lot - such a compact well balanced story, with fully fleshed out characters and authentic dialogue. Nice reading, lovely writing. God bless.
Shari Armstrong 01/27/06
I loved this! very very well done (and my husband and I joke that he'll never leave me for another woman, a muscle car -maybe, but never another woman lol)
Val Clark01/28/06
What a delightful story. The relationship between husband and wife, Emmett and his Lord and Emmett and the boy were all explored to satisfaction in such a short period of time. Well written and a thoroughly enjoyable read.
Pat Guy 01/29/06
Boy - do I love this one! Great in every way! Really, really GOOD!
Donnah Cole01/29/06
I believe this one will be a Hallmark special some day! Great story line, easy read, enjoyed the characters.
Maxx .01/30/06
Good, quick pacing. Wonderful lesson to us all. God in action through "everyday" people. Congrats on your win!
Julianne Jones01/30/06
Beautiful story. Really enjoyed this. Congrats on your win.
Rachel Rudd02/02/06
Wonderfully-written story! The dialogue really draws one into the story. I loved the fact that he gave the boy the car that they were working on. Congratulations on your win!