The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a wonderful story! I would have liked it better had you done more showing the story play out, then only telling it. My grandma was also stubborn about accepting Jesus, and I learned after she died that she did, indeed, give in to him. Continue writing- you got this!
05/23/19
It is hard, and common, to spend years worrying about a loved one who is not showing fruit of a saved life. I would have liked another reference to the date so that Frank's note was a better indication of when he gave his life to Christ. Was it before Betty left home? Right before he died? This wouldn't change the reassurance that he was indeed in Heaven, but it would be helpful in piecing together the life of your character.