The Official Writing Challenge
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01/24/06
This was a bit hard to read and understand. Also, the semi-colons were not used properly. You may want to add more variety to your sentence structure as well. God bless.
01/27/06
When I enter into the Advanced Section of the Challenge, I am usually overwhelmed by the great writing of my fellow-Writers who have obtained upperclass status; however, this piece was beyond my understanding. The first sentence was a bit confusing, and I never did a grasp of meaning or conception. Thank you for sharing, however, and God Bless!
01/29/06
This entry reminds of me, in style, of a book my husband and I are reading called "Escape from Reason." It is very theologically written. I think that your piece is too "preachy." But we do definitely want to have a good start on life and a good start on what God wants us to do. God bless.