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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Start (01/16/06)

TITLE: Batteries Not Included
By Kenn Allan
01/20/06


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"Hey, wait'll you see what I found!"

Daken watched Avril gallop towards him with a paper sack clenched tightly in his claws. Having known him since the eve of creation, he was familiar with the varying degrees of excitement in his best friend's screech. Whatever was in that bag was worthy of his highest frequency.

"What's up? Daken called, fiddling impatiently with his pointed tail.

Avril's face was redder than usual as he trotted the last few miles to his friend's side. "Look at this," he panted, sliding a box from the paper sack. "It's brand new."

Through the cellophane panel, Daken could see the figure of a little human dressed in a dark suit and carrying a Bible. "Wow," he gasped. "It's a Christian action figure."

"Yeah, some stupid angel must've dropped him," Avril said. "Somebody's gonna get it, and good!"

"C'mon, let's take him out of the box," Daken shouted.

With a single mind and flashing claws, the two little devils tore viciously into the brightly-colored box. Soon nothing was left but the little figure and a pile of shredded cardboard and cellophane.

"Kinda boring for an action figure, isn't he?" Avril observed. "He looks good but doesn't do nuthin'."

"Yeah," answered Daken. "Lemme see if I can find the Start button." He picked up the figure and turned him in every possible direction, studying it with yellow eyes. "Nope, I don't think it has one."

Avril snatched the figure from his friend's grasp and gave it a hasty inspection of his own. "Aww, I give up," he growled, tossing the figure back to Daken. "I vote we bust it up."

"Naw," Daken answered. "I don't wanna get into any trouble."

"How 'bout we play with it in the dirt?"

"Naw, we can do that any time." He started picking at the figure's suit. "Hey, wait a minute..."

"What?"

"I think I found sumptin'." Daken peeled back the suit coat and revealed a small rectangular opening on the left side of the figure's chest. "Now, whaddya suppose that's for?" he mused.

"I get it!" Avril grabbed the figure and twisted the tiny Bible from its hand." See? It's the same shape and size as this." He slid the book into the opening over the figure's heart. It fit perfectly.

"Yikes!" shrieked Daken. "Look at it go!"

The little figure kicked its feet and swung its arms, catching Avril off guard.

"First Corinthians 10:20... I would not that ye should have fellowship with devils," it blared.

"Look out," Avril shouted. "I can't hold 'im!"

The figure squirmed out from between the demon's fingers and dropped to the ground, where it immediately sprang to its feet.

"Ephesians 6:11... Put on the whole armor of God, that ye may be able to stand against the wiles of the devil," it said.

"Grab it!" shouted Daken.

"I'm not gonna grab it," shouted Avril. "You grab it!"

"James 4:7... Resist the devil, and he will flee from you," announced the figure. It turned its back on its previous captors and headed out into the world. "Romans 16:20... And the God of peace shall bruise Satan under your feet shortly. The grace of our Lord Jesus Christ be with you. Amen."

The two demons watched motionless until the figure disappeared in the distance.

Daken was the first to speak. "So," he grumbled, "What do you wanna do?"

Avril shrugged. "I dunno. What do you want to do?"


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Amy Michelle Wiley 01/24/06
Hahahaha! This was great and the ending, oh the ending was perfect! LOL
Lauren Bombardier01/24/06
Hehe...fantastic! It made me laugh out loud, and that's not easy to do!
Karri Compton01/24/06
Very interesting. I especially liked your reference to Jungle Book.
Sharon Singley01/25/06
this is so clever! I really enjoyed it.
Jan Ackerson 01/25/06
Top notch!
Lynda Schultz 01/26/06
This would make a great skit.
Shari Armstrong 01/26/06
That was great!I could see the whole thign :)
Pat Guy 01/26/06
This was awesome! Fantastic! It could be used so many different ways! What a fun read!
Julianne Jones01/27/06
Incredible! You've managed to wrap a wonderful lesson up inside a funny attention-grabbing story. I can see this as a skit, an illustration for a sermon or lesson, a children's comic, or even a book-length MS. Well-done!
Cassie Memmer01/27/06
This is great, Kenn. I think youngsters too, would love it, maybe a whole series. More, encore! LOL!
Marilyn Schnepp 01/27/06
A Masterpiece of artistic Creativity! What else can I say? "Batteries not included"...it only works with God's Word in Mankind's Heart! Give this Author a Gold Medal!
Val Clark01/28/06
Oh, very well done! Entertaining, provocative, great dialogue and oodles of truth. What more could I want.
Debbie Sickler01/28/06
Demons playing with Christian action figures, huh? All from the word 'start'. Waaaay more creative than I was this week (probably most other entries too! lol)

This was fun to read and kept me guessing what type of animal they were for a while. Never would have suspected demons.

On a serious note, it painted a picture of us as toys to play with, but something to fear when the word of God is applied to our hearts. Great message.
janet rubin01/28/06
Thank you for not boring me! I loved this. Great writing.
Maxx .01/29/06
lol.. I loved it. Very creative and well written! This is a keeper... a very strong entry!
Cheryl Harrison 01/29/06
Initially I was drawn in by the title, and was I glad! Good use of humor to teach a very important lesson. Very creative! Good job.