The Official Writing Challenge
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05/19/18
With elaboration and some quotation marks, this piece could be convicting. Well, it is convicting. And it is worth refining, I think. Fill it out. Tell us more.
I agree with Linda. Must've been a harsh situation to experience, though, and a little more info would help...such as how you felt, how you went on with your life, how it affects you now, et al. Good job, though.
05/22/18
I'd like to hear more. I liked the part describing mom's facial expression and what it triggered in MC's memory.