The Official Writing Challenge
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07/13/17
This sounds like a very interesting life story and I enjoyed reading the snippets of it. (On a side note: I've been to Kunming!)

Red Ink: Due to the word limit, it felt a little disjointed and unfocused. Instead of trying to fit so much into 750 words, try to focus on one event or time period, with only a couple of sentences to bring in any needed background information.
07/14/17
Excellent job! Thanks for sharing this story with us.
Blessings,
07/15/17
Made me want to know more! I agree with Jenny that the snippets became a little erratic but there is lots of scope for telling more in the future!
Every blessing
07/15/17
There was much to take in as I read your piece. It kept my interest. Thanks for sharing.