The Official Writing Challenge
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03/11/17
An original and creative look at an old story. Well written!
03/11/17
I enjoyed the narrative take on the story.

Red Ink: look into keeping your verb tenses the same to indicate the various time placements of the story. You began by describing an event in the past and using the 'had' form but then switched to present tense for the same time period. It took me a little bit to realize the dialogue was still taking place in the past.
This is a well-told and well written retelling of that famous Bible story. Nicely done.
03/12/17
Loved this!
Blessings~
03/12/17
Nice retelling of one of our favorite stories. We never get tired of hearing how God will always keep his promises and deliver us out of imprisonment. God bless
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