The Official Writing Challenge
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02/17/17
Loved this entry, most especially the close!

Blesings~
02/17/17
Great ending!
02/20/17
You put me right there in the middle of it - and a great ending/tie-up. Thanks so much for sharing!
02/22/17
I have been to Tokyo & experienced the crush of the trains on a good day, so I can relate to what it might be like during a crisis. You did a good job of describing the scene and how people just keep cramming into the open doors. I felt as though I was a colleague along on the trip. I liked your analogy/ contrast to the multitudes in heaven. I thought it worked well to make your point.
Congratulations on ranking 6th in your level and 19 overall. Happy Dance!