The Official Writing Challenge
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01/16/05
Really wonderful. The initial thought flowed so well from beginning to end. Thank you for this wonderful piece.
01/16/06

Wow, very, very powerful!
Wow. This was very moving. It is difficult to find eloquent words to describe the brutality of death, but you have succeeded.
Beautifully chilling...
01/18/06
I loved this. I liked reading about the past as it made the present situation more bearable and real. Good writing! Oh, also loved your descriptions.:)
I was grabbed right away. I like that in a story ;) The read was fluid. I felt like I was there with the kids. The transition from past to present was beautiful. The ending filled me with emotion. Very well written!
01/20/06
Well written; but then I expect Advanced to be without error or blemish...and it was. Beautifully done, and a masterpiece filled with real emotion...Great job!
Soooo good! The transition to childhood play back to the hospital room was smooth and gripping!