The Official Writing Challenge
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Really wonderful. The initial thought flowed so well from beginning to end. Thank you for this wonderful piece.

Wow, very, very powerful!
Wow. This was very moving. It is difficult to find eloquent words to describe the brutality of death, but you have succeeded.
Beautifully chilling...
I loved this. I liked reading about the past as it made the present situation more bearable and real. Good writing! Oh, also loved your descriptions.:)
I was grabbed right away. I like that in a story ;) The read was fluid. I felt like I was there with the kids. The transition from past to present was beautiful. The ending filled me with emotion. Very well written!
Well written; but then I expect Advanced to be without error or blemish...and it was. Beautifully done, and a masterpiece filled with real emotion...Great job!
Soooo good! The transition to childhood play back to the hospital room was smooth and gripping!