The Official Writing Challenge
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02/07/17
A very funny story! Thanks for sharing it with everyone!
02/08/17
A nice read. It was a little too predictable for me, but well written and flowed smoothly. Thanks. God bless.
This is a delightful story. I enjoyed the delightful humor. Be careful of POV shifts. By doing this, you will also be able to do more showing and less telling. The ending was great too. I liked your message. It's clear but wasn't overly preachy. With a bit of tweaking, this could make a great kids' story.
02/10/17
I love how you tapped into the oh so literal world of children. It brings back conversations with my own. Very clever, well written, and right on target with the topic. Great job.