The Official Writing Challenge
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02/08/17
A well written piece. You should score high points. It flowed well and you masterfully created many wonderful images. I think, this is just my opinion, a twist at the end like her thanking the audience and then a slip of the tongue occurring might have nailed it. See what you did! you had me so involved in your story is became a part of me. Wow! great job.
02/08/17
I really enjoyed your story very well written ad on target with the theme. Loved the wisdom of Godly simple people.
This is a lovely story. I enjoyed the characters and the dialog felt authentic. You had a lot of back story that bogged me down a bit in the beginning. I'm not sure you needed it all, and at the very least you could have sprinkled it throughout your store. I did enjoy your take on the topic. I thought your message powerful. You also have a delightful sense of humor.
02/10/17
Congrats!
Blessings~
Congratulations on ranking 4th in your level and 19 overall. Happy Dance!