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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Escape (01/02/06)

TITLE: Escape - ours for the asking
By Suzanne R
01/09/06


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Place - Canaan
Joseph – aged 17:

“Get me outta here! These ropes hurt so bad. Don’t they know who I am? Help!”

“Can’t believe those scumbag brothers of mine sold me to slave-traders. Dad’s gonna kill ‘em. They’ll never get away with this.”

“Can’t stand it. The muck they pour down our throats. Having to … you know … while tied to these other stinky men. Not even able to wipe myself properly. I’d try and work the ropes loose, but they burn so bad.”

“I’m gonna escape. Gotta escape. Jehovah, God of Abraham, Isaac and Jacob, help. Please. I wanna go home. I’m not much more than a kid. PLEASE.”

Joseph’s brothers:
“Gone! That boastful dreamer is gone! Someone go buy some booze. Let’s grab one of Dad's young goats. Better drain the blood before throwing it on the barbeque. It’s time to celebrate.”

“Guess we’ve got to go home sometime. What are we going to tell the folks? We need a story, or Dad will have us out scouring the hills for Joseph for the rest of our lives. He wouldn’t do that for us.”

“Okay – here’s the plan. We’ll make out he’s been eaten by wild animals or something. Here – we’ve got his fancy coat. Rip it – splash around a bit of the blood from that goat. There – looks convincing.”

“Okay, time to go home and break the news – freedom at last from that pesky kid!”

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Place - Egypt
Joseph – aged 23:

“Ma’am, the master has entrusted me with everything. He has not withheld anything except you. I cannot betray his trust. I hear your threats, but believe me, I would rather rot in jail than sleep with you. Escape? Not for a moment, ma’am. Not on those terms.”

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Joseph – aged 30:
“Redeemer God, you have done it! I’m not only free, but am in charge of the whole land of Egypt! Thank you for the gift of interpreting dreams. With your help, I’m confident of doing a good job here. Escape? You’ve granted more than escape!”

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(Joseph – aged 39)
Joseph’s brothers:
“Sir, we beg of you, take pity on our family and approve our application to buy grain here in Egypt. Your mercy is our only way of escape from sure starvation. Please.”


Joseph:
“You are spies. You are up to no good. Prove your innocence to me. You swear your youngest brother is at home with your father. Fine. Until you bring him here, I’ll keep one of you imprisoned. Soldiers – take that man to the dungeons.”

Brothers (speaking amongst themselves):
“Surely our actions are catching up with us. Is it not enough that our father has mourned these many years? Is it not enough that each of us has been tormented daily by guilt? The God of our fathers has not let us escape. We are being punished for that atrocity.”


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(Joseph – aged 40)
Brothers:
“We’ve brought Benjamin. It almost killed our father to let him go. And here is the money for last year’s food. We don’t know how it came to be in our sacks. Please, sir, be kind to us. Please spare us from sure starvation. We beg you for permission to buy from Egypt’s stores of grain.”


Joseph:
“So this is the kid brother, eh? Fine young man he is. Keep your money – your payment was complete last year. I need some space … I’ll have Simeon sent up from the cells. Be ready for lunch at midday.”

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Two days later:
Brothers:
“Impossible! The governor’s silver goblet is here in Benjamin’s sack of grain? What hope do we have? God is punishing us. We shall never escape. And no, soldiers, you can’t take Benjamin. Take us all. We cannot face Father without Benjamin.”


Joseph:
“My dear brothers, don’t you see who I am? I am Joseph. You intended to harm me, but God intended it for good. He has given our family a way to escape the famine. He put me in this place at this time to save many.”

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God’s ways are above our ways. Joseph seemed to be captive for life, betrayed by his own people. Yet through the favoured son, Joseph, the Israelites escaped certain destruction.

Centuries later, another Israelite submitted to what seemed like captivity, betrayed by His own people. Yet through the favoured Son, Jesus, any who believe can escape destruction.

Thanks to the captive, escape is ours for the asking.



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Sandra Petersen 01/10/06
Interesting take with updated language ('booze', 'scumbag', 'barbeque', etc.) on Joseph's rise to second-in-command of Egypt. But you didn't update the event throughout, perhaps to ready the reader for the ending conclusion.
I thought the conclusion was very well-stated.
Yes, escape from hellfire is ours through Jesus Christ. But He has also commissioned us to go and bring others to the same salvation like Joseph did with his family.
Joseph is a type, as was Moses, of He who was to be the ultimate Deliverer.
Good job!
Jan Ackerson 01/10/06
I liked this approach. I'm not sure what to call it--it's very like a drama, except that some of the monologs are internal, and there is dialog as well...but whatever it is, it works for me. And your conclusion is excellent, and beautifully done.
Linda Watson Owen01/12/06
Yes, very interesting take indeed! Being able to flit into the minds of all these characters is quite a ride! Good job!!
Pat Guy 01/12/06
Wow! This is great! I so enjoyed reading this! 'Having to ... you know...' - only you Suz! :) Great format - great work - well done! :)
Julianne Jones01/12/06
Great re-telling of a well-known story. Loved the way you linked it together with references to escape in each scene. And the conclusion is very well done. Good job!
Lynda Lee Schab 01/13/06
Suzanne - I loved this! Very, very creative and well crafted. I loved the progression of the story in modern-day terms. Made it come alive to me again and look at this amazing piece of history in a new way. Well done!
Blessings, Lynda
Sally Hanan01/13/06
Your last line was the perfect summary for this.
Anita Neuman01/14/06
Great approach. At first, I was distracted by the brief little snippets, but by the end, it really worked. And I loved your conclusion, too.
Maxx .01/14/06
Well done. Very good. I appreciated this. The quality that I've come to expect. Excellent!
Beth Muehlhausen01/16/06
Interesting approach to use "headlines" like this. Well done. Loved the ending!!
B Brenton01/18/06
People love it and good and well, another brilliant story to add to your anthology :)

And you know I love it too.