The Official Writing Challenge
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11/11/16
I know exactly how you feel! You've captured this mothering emotion well :-)
This is a delightful story. It took me back to days with my son. He could never sit still in church, so he quietly roamed about. Now he's graduated from Duke Divinity school, so there's always hope. ;)

My only red ink would be to tone down the exclamation points. Instead, let your delightful word choice do the exclaiming for you.

I think you nailed the topic. I could easily picture the little guy creating havoc as Mom wants to hide. I thoroughly enjoyed the story from beginning to end.
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