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01/09/06
You captured the weariness and frustration of a person in this situation very well.
In paragraph four after the opening Scripture, you seem to switch point-of-view, getting into her husband's head to tell what he was feeling. Better to stick to her feelings and let the reader guess at his.
Good job at showing that human counsel is fallible and, at times, contradictory.
God does have to get our attention in very dramatic ways sometimes, but He will turn something that seems so ugly and awful into His plan.
01/10/06
Amy experienced the "peace that passes understanding" in her trip to the hospital. Very lovely.
A lesson in obedience, then faith and trust. A power-packed story. :-)