The Official Writing Challenge
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10/14/16
Wow! That is some definite absolute trust!
I understand what you were trying to do, but I kind of felt pulled from one event to the other. I really like the short "breather" in between each different step in her life, though.
That is an overwhelming story. Those one line sentences smattered throughout give a very short reprieve before the onslaught of fast-paced activity begins again. I actually felt overloaded reading this one. God often leads us into some territory that is difficult to negotiate. Good writing.
10/17/16
Well written and intense. You hit the topic on the head. Thanks for sharing.
10/17/16
Well written and intense. You hit the topic on the head. Thanks for sharing.
And life moves on.

Your transitions quickly moved us on the the next scene but the final word said it all.
10/25/16
What a whirlwind of trials! I was surprised (in a good way) by Lois' final word.