The Official Writing Challenge
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01/29/16
Loved this!

Well done.

God bless~
01/29/16
This is my favorite so far. Well done.
01/29/16
Good advice from a father. I like the way he made his point. Blessings, LaVonne
01/29/16
Great read. I love the way you did not solve the problem, but left it as a faith walk as he has to trust in God to show him what's next in his life. Great writing!
01/29/16
Wise words in this story. How precious that Nick had a Godly father to listen and counsel him. Well written.

I did find myself a little confused between Nick and Tim, and who was who, at first. But when I read back over the beginning, I realised Tim was Nick's father, and discovered who was speaking.

Great story.
01/31/16
I liked the dialog between the father and son. It seemed authentic. It is always good to know you have someone in your corner.

Well written.
Great dialogue and good advice! Fits the topic perfectly.
Love the idea that Tim encouraged his son, rather than focusing on mistakes that put the business under and then further encouraged him by pointing out his trait of persistence.

Red Ink: Writing style fluctuated between casual and more formal. Single overall tone would improve the flow of this story. (Using contractions make it more casual - for instance...that's, rather than that is.)

Great story & life lesson!
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