The Official Writing Challenge
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12/14/05
Work on a variety of word choices: you wrote "the little thing" at least 7 times, and you used "life" 3 times in the first sentence.

Good pay-off at the end--and good lesson about persistence.
12/18/05
What I most enjoyed about this was the parallels to the individual growing within a caring nurturing community. Yeggy.