The Official Writing Challenge
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You did a nice job with this piece. I enjoyed your recollection in the beginning and remember similar things.

My main red ink would be to use exclamation points sparingly. Instead let your words do the exclaiming. Also, you had a typo--lightening instead of lightning.

I think you did a good job of expressing your point of view. Thank you for sharing it.
06/16/15
Enjoyed your reminisces, and certainly needed the reminder of your point. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing!
06/17/15
I like your Sheep and Goats type summary. Good down to earth advice.