The Official Writing Challenge
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04/25/15
Great story. It ends rather abruptly however.
Often a short story will make a full circle by re-introducing the "hook" from the beginning of the story and fitting it in again at the end. With this particular piece you could end your story by using your beginning sentence to bring closure at the end of your story. Example:
"The highway was his playground. He rode his sleek, yellow motorcycle through the twisties on Dooley Mountain. But no longer...In a split second of time, his life took a disastrous turn..." - (and then bring in the part about how he has found a new way to connect.) This is just a suggestion.
04/27/15
What beautiful story...touching, heartfelt and lovely entry.

I loved it!

Great job.

God bless~