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Oh, this made me laugh so much! Beautiful!!!!
I should have added...I rarely read titles, so I had to come to the conclusion that Willie was a snowman as I read your piece. If you use this elsewhere, please consider changing the title. That gradual realization was an experience I wouldn't trade for anything.
I agree with the title change suggestion. Since I knew the title, I found the story hilarious, but I think it would have had a different kind of impact if I didn't realize right away what was going on... ;-) I think a not-too-in-your-face comment about it all being part of God's plan would have been kinda neat, too... But what a great story, hehehehe....
Guess I'm an incurable romantic, but this was very touching. Good crafting. Well written.
This was so funny!! Loved the last line!!
Ha ha, woot woot! Death to snowmen! Naw, actually, I loved the story. Very clever. :-)
A great 'irreverant' take on the tragedy of Willie Loman in 'Death of a Salesman'! I'm still grinning from ear to ear! What a treat!
I thought of "Death of a Salesman" immediately, too, so the title is essential to your take. But even knowing the inevitable end, I had to read to the last word, just to see how you were going to do it!
I agree. Your title gave away the surprise ending. Very well written, and a delight to read. And very creative, I might add. Well done.
Although never having seen what happens to a snowman when spring arrives, I could picture this so well. Funny and well done. And so creative. God Bless.
Very creative and humorous. I enjoyed this entry very much.
Very creative! Thoroughly enjoyed!

Wow, this was great. Fun to read, even if the title did ruin the surprise. The end was great, I needed the lift.

Thanks, and God bless,

I think the fact that this was a snowman would have made a great punchline, either way skillfully controlled with great choice of phrases. Certainly something different for Spring!
Creative and clever! 'Pure as snow'? :) I, too, would have liked a different title if only to get the impact of the head rolling off with a thud! :) What a fun read!
I absolutely loved this! Really enjoyed the head falling off with a thud. LOL! Encore! Encore!
Very good (clap clap clap)! I have to admit that I clicked on this story initially and then was interrupted - and when I came back I'd forgotten the title and actually skipped it and went right into the copy. So I did appreciate the discovery process - and the shock factor!!! FUN!
Oh my! Somehow the title sailed right past me and when I got to the last line I said, "Huh?"
Then when I read Jan's comment about it being funny, I said, "Hey...wait a second. I must have missed something. That's not funny."

ROFL (now). I get it. Death of a salesman? WooHoo, so clever. (I shouldn't be reading when it is time to sleep). :0)