The Official Writing Challenge
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12/07/05
This is delightful. I wondered if it was based on an actual event. Rhymed poetry is always tricky. You meter gets a little sticky in spots, but overall a fine job.
12/07/05
A very tender event; I think it would make a better short story than poem. A sweet memory--thanks for sharing it.
I loved the tale you told but felt that you tried to marry a light funny tale to a heavy solemn rhythm. Can I encourage you to try re-writing it as a short story because I feel that it has the potential to be a really delightful piece. God Bless.
12/08/05
A tender touch and caring for the animals. God's work is always delightful, for both kids and adults. Thanks for sharing this poem.
12/09/05
The story is great - but it gets lost in the attempt to make it rhyme. I think it would make a great short story, also. I am an avid animal lover, so loved the human kindness this story told. Thank you for sharing!
12/12/05
Delightful image. Yes, a short story...mostly because there is more we want to know. The possibilites for interesting interaction are endless. Think how Noah felt. :0)