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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Husband and Wife (08/08/14)

TITLE: Harry Loves Maude
By lynn gipson
08/09/14


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“Maude! Bring my slippers!”
 
“Get them yoreself, Harry. I ain't yore personal slave. Who died and made you boss, anyways?”
 
Harry cranked his Lazy Boy to its upright position, but before he could sit straight up Maude had fetched his slippers and dropped them by his feet in their proper left-foot, right-foot positions. She huffily planted a cheek on his bald head and returned to her own chair.
 
“Thanks, Maudie. Yore a peach.”
 
“Yeah, yeah, yeah. I'm a peach, and yore the pits, Harry. If I had knew you was so lazy, I never would have married you 50 years ago. Just think, I gave up Billy Joe Hawkins for you, and today he's a millionaire.”
 
“He also cheated on all three of his ex-wives. I never once cheated on you. Besides, you didn't love him, Maude, you loved me.”
 
“I know that, Harry, but I coulda learnt to love him.”
 
“You don't learn to love anyone, Maudie. You either love'em or you don't. And you loved me. Still do, I'm gatherin’, by that little smackaroo just now.” Harry chuckled.
 
“Yeah, I do, Harry, but only the good Lord knows why.” Maude looked toward the heavens.
 
“Awe, Maude, ain't I always been good to you? Ain't I always worked hard and provided you with everythin’ you needed?”
 
“Yeah, Harry. I just wished you would act grateful for all the things I do for you. You just take me for granted, Harry. How come you never fetch my slippers?”
 
“Why, you never once asked me too, Maudie.” Harry rolled his eyes.
 
“I shouldn't have to ask, Harry. You should just do it! I cook for you, clean for you, and been yore nursemaid ever since we got married, and you never even once returned the favors I do for you.”
 
“What's got into you, Maude? You never talked like this afore.”
 
“Well, I been meanin' to tell you, Harry. I been thinkin' 'bout a divorce.”
 
“Are you crazy, woman? We been married for 50 years! I ain’t givin' you no divorce!”
 
“Well, I wont one, Harry. I wont one.” Maude stomped off into the kitchen to fetch Harry a cup of coffee.
 
Harry didn't sleep very well that night. Maudie wanted a divorce! He just didn't understand it. How could she think of such a thing after all this time?
 
He knew she had seemed unhappy at times, but he thought it was because the good Lord never gave them any children. Maudie had wanted a daughter badly, and Harry had yearned for a son. They were married for 10 years before Maude found out from Doc Jenkins that she couldn’t conceive.
 
That's why he had become like a little boy to her, he supposed. She needed to mother someone, and he had to admit, he liked the mothering.
 
The next morning, Harry fetched Maude's slippers. He made her breakfast, dinner, and her supper. He waited on her hand and foot for the next several days, until one day, Maude could take it no more.
 
“Harry, if you don't stop smotherin' me, I'm gonna shore 'nuff divorce you!” Maude exploded.
 
“Land's sake, woman! Make up yore mind. What do you want from me? I'm tryin' to be a good husband so you won't wont a divorce!”
 
“Harry, I don't wont a divorce. I just needed to know you love and appreciate me, and now I do. Now I do.”
 
“I do love you, Maudie.” Harry raised up from his Lazy Boy and went to sit by Maude on the sofa. He put his arms around her and kissed her on the cheek.
 
“I love you, too, Harry.” Maude tearfully kissed him on his bald head again, but this time with a little more passion.
 
Two weeks later Harry surprised Maude with a black Lab puppy. She had always wanted a dog, but Harry thought dogs were too much trouble. They named him Sonny, and he was the perfect solution. Maude finally had a baby to raise.
 
Harry and Maude just celebrated the 60th wedding anniversary. For the past ten years, they have been happily taking care of Sonny, and each other.


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CD (Camille) Swanson 08/14/14
Awwwww. What a sweet story!

Great interaction and dialogue between the two MC's. I also liked the message..."show me and let me know I'm appreciated" ---I've known many couples who are lovey-dovey in front of others, but home an entirely different story. And, some like this couple...who although might seem crass to the average listener, love each other immensely and without reserve.

Loved the puppy and his name. Great job my friend.

Excellent work.

God bless~
Robert Douglas Brown08/14/14
This article made me laugh as well as made me stop and think about how much I love my wife. I am no Harry, and she is no Maude. We have a long way to go for our 50th anniversary. When that time and date arrives, I will look back on this story and have a good laugh no doubt!

Keep up the greatness!

God Bless!!
Virgil Youngblood 08/14/14
On topic and a fun read with a good message. Well done.
Brenda Rice 08/15/14
I think Harry and Maude live next door. They seem so real and familiar.

Very good dialogue, wonderful storytelling, you are right on topic and added to all that is your good humor.

Thanks for sharing.
Noel Mitaxa 08/16/14
At first I thought this might be a little Maude-lin, but it turned into a totally enjoyable read, with natural dialogue and strong characters. You've also
tucked in some great moral vignettes as well.
Well done.



Chris Goglin 08/16/14
Great story! I think most of us can relate to the intimate conversations of the two of them! It would have been funny to end the story with Harry fetching some new slippers for Maude! Great Job!!
Rachel Barrett08/16/14
Haha! That kept me chuckling--and guessing. I wasn't sure which way it was going until the end. I liked it.
Danielle King 08/16/14
Ah... methinks this could be a winner. Loved the interaction between your characters and the voice was so real. (I thought you'd made lots of typos to start with.) This is great for the topic and fun to read. Great job all round!
Joe Moreland08/16/14
This had a nice and comfy feel to it, just like those slippers, I'm sure. Maude and Harry felt real to me, and their conversation and actions felt genuine. It was more like listening in than reading.

I liked how you slipped in the suggestion that Harry had been providing himself as a surrogate child for Maude, since they couldn't conceive. Men have a tendency to want to fix things for their wives, and it is just the kind of thing a man might do, without even realizing it himself, or her ever recognizing that that is his motive.

Great job!
Sheldon Bass 08/16/14
Just a quick word to let you know I read your entry. And enjoyed it immensely. I was aghast to see so many entries with no comments on them, and others with many comments. I'm only one, but at least I can do my part, so I'm off to do that now. Blessings to you! PS, almost forgot, I look forward to seeing your first entry in Masters next week!
Diane Bowman08/17/14
This was a fun read! Too bad it took him 50 years to get her a puppy. :)
Bea Edwards 08/17/14
Really enjoyed the dialogue in your precious an precocious tale.
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/18/14
Your story was fun . . . and tender--a good combination!
Terry Atchison08/19/14
Reminds me of my parents in their later years. Very well written.
CD (Camille) Swanson 08/21/14
Congrats!

So happy for you Lynn. I loved this.

God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/21/14
I love this. I was smiling so wide my cheeks hurt. This is just a delight. The only red ink I have is you didn't need the last paragraph. I totally got it. It can be so hard to find that thin line from telling the moral of the story or knowing if the reader will get it without telling. Your descriptions were perfect and I thoroughly enjoyed this one. Congratulations on your ribbon. Happy Dance!!
Robert Douglas Brown08/21/14
Great job my friend!

God Bless!
Brenda Rice 08/21/14
Congrats Lynn. I like this one a whole bunch. Good writing.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/21/14
Congratulations on ranking 23 overall! Happy Dance!