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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Day and Night (07/10/14)

TITLE: Two Sisters
By lynn gipson
07/16/14


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Two Sisters

As sisters, they are individuals,
God created with reason and rhyme,
One takes up where the other left off,
As day is to night, every time.



Day

A fair haired beauty with hazel eyes,
Lips of roses and cheeks that bloom,
A smile that would rival Mona Lisa,
The heart is hidden in a secret room.

What mystery does she hold inside?
Eleven years going on twenty five,
Her intelligence knows no boundary,
She tells the Truth; Jesus is alive!

Her most prize possession? A Rosary,
Pink and white, her favorite colors,
She prays from the soul of her child,
With solemn tears; blessing others.

This gentle girl is rare and sensitive,
She feels things others can't see,
Such a gift from God above,
Her spirit of light shines beautifully.



Night

A dark haired beauty; eyes black as coal,
This child was born asking, “Why”?
Why does the moon seem so close to me?
When it's really so high in the sky?

Dancing and sparkling her day away,
Sweet, yet temperamental; she beguiles,
One would swim the ocean blue,
For one of her dazzling smiles.

Long-legged and slim is her style,
A daddy's girl through and through,
She has his ways, so much like him,
With a heart so loyal and true.

She knows her Savior, yes she does,
She prays to Him every night,
“Dear Lord, watch over this big wide world,
And keep me in Your super sight.”



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Robert Douglas Brown07/17/14
This poem captures the difference of 2 lives and the likeness that is no doubt sent from the Lord. It makes one stop and contemplate how the Lord works the same but differently when it comes to the precious lives and spirits of 2 young girls. It is very well written and comes from the heart of God.
Lollie Hofer 07/18/14
I really like the contrast between the two sisters. Great poem and good use of this week's topic.
Joe Moreland07/19/14
I know the word has already been used by another commenter, but sweet is the one word I can think of that sums this piece up well. You gave us vivid pictures of both girls to where I felt I could visualize them, including their personalities. Nice work!
Margaret Kearley 07/19/14
Thank you for introducing us to these two contrasting loved ones with such depth of description. Your lovely poem brings them alive.
Jennifer Liang07/19/14
Hi,
This was a great use of Day and Night showing how different sisters are.

Shouldn't it be "most prized possession" instead of prize?

I loved the sentence "Dancing and sparkling her day away"!

Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/19/14
This is so lovely and creative. I loved the juxtaposition of the two and think your slump must surely be over. The only colored ink I would offer would be to add the hyphen between words like light-haired girl. The topic is spot on and fresh and creative. You did a splendid job with this piece.
Danielle King 07/20/14
A creative and original take on the topic and a delight to read.
Graham Insley 07/20/14
This poem was very smooth and an enjoyable read. well done.

Blessings.
Brenda Rice 07/20/14
I love the energy created by your choice of words while describing the girls.

As others have said, it covers the topic very well. It is well written.

Thanks for sharing.
Bea Edwards 07/20/14
I think you did a fabulous job illuminating this weeks topic.

You may feel in a slump but your writing speaks otherwise.
Rachel Malcolm 07/20/14
What a great interpretation of this week's topic! Beautifully fresh!
Dee Kyalo07/21/14
Very creative poem capturing the differences in the lives of the two sisters.
Jody Day 07/21/14
Nice take on the topic, and a lovely vignette portraying sisters. Good job:)
Judith Gayle Smith07/21/14
This makes me want to run and hug my sister. We both thank you.
Camille (C D) Swanson 07/21/14
Exquisite in style and powerful in depiction. I loved this entire piece that brought joy to my heart as I read it.

Fantastic job and completely on topic. A very unique way of presenting this weeks challenge.

Lovely wording, poetry in motion and emotions for sure!

Excellent work.

God bless~
Diane Bowman07/21/14
As different as day and night!

Great take on the topic. Makes me wish I had a sister.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/24/14
Congratulations my friend! Happy Dance!!
Camille (C D) Swanson 07/24/14
Congrats Lynn!
I simply loved this darling poem. Well done.

God bless~
Pam Ford Davis 07/24/14
Congratulations on your high ranking!

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