The Official Writing Challenge
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11/29/05
Excellent writing! Descriptions that can only come from the pen of a Writer with a masterful way with words. My only suggestion, (and I may be wrong) instead of asterisks, what about "six months later", or "one year later". I was just a bit confused at another awakening so soon after the first one; but, what do I know? (smile) It's lovely! Kudos!
Have to agree with Marilyn, the astericks are distracting. Think of an elegant transition "another season", etc.

Great perspective and audience draw with your visual imagery.
11/29/05
I can definitely relate to that first paragraph! Thanks for the thought-provoking comparison of the lush, sheltering vine and the "vertical desert". Good job!