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06/14/14
Your contrasts in the stanzas, between "who" came back is good. I enjoyed your message contained in this rhythmic rhyme.
Exquisite. A beautiful paeon of praise to Jesus!

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06/16/14
Beautiful!

God bless~
Praying for your bouncebackability through Jesus, our blessed Messiah . . .
06/17/14
This was beautiful. It ebbed and flowed, just like the circumstances you describe. It had the feel of an ocean tide, hitting the beach; retreating. Crashing ashore again, then falling away once more.

Usually I most admire poems for their clever use of words, or the artistic way the words are strung together, but this made me FEEL the pulse of your poetry.

Great job! And, I am praying for your surgery today.

God Bless!
06/18/14
I liked the contrast between "I came back" and "You..."

There are some deep thoughts here worth more than a simple read. Well done.

Praying for your surgery.

Blessings.
06/18/14
Just beautiful! I loged this!, praying for your surgery!
06/18/14
Typo:Loved this!
06/19/14
Congratulations!

God Bless~
Congratulations on ranking 1st in your level and 11 overall.
06/20/14
Many congrats on that 1st place ribbon that tops the page!