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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Gossip Mill (05/08/14)

TITLE: Just a trickle
By Margaret Kearley
05/15/14


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The trickle from a hillside nook
Became a gentle, winding brook,
Tranquil with rural charm.
Upon this pleasant country scene
The flowing brook became a stream,
Harmless, controlled and calm.

The winding stream, so innocent,
Increased in hurrying intent
And as it scurried past,
More sparkling rivílets joined its force
United in a rushing course
To make one river vast.

The river rushed on recklessly
Until it poured into the sea
Encompassed by the tide,
And no-one then could trace the brook
That started in a hidden nook
Upon a far hillside.
_______________________________________


The trickle of a rumoured word
So softly whispered, keenly heard,
Seemed harmless in intent.
But listeners, who felt inspired,
Considered that the word required
A slight embellishment.

The trickle soon became a brook,
New facts you couldnít overlook
Were added - for it seemed
Important to make all aware
Of truths to be revealed, laid bare:
The brook became a stream.

More coursing rivílets joined the flow
As those with a desire to know
Gave added drops of news.
The river vast could not be stemmed,
And some, now openly condemned,
Did reputation lose.

The gossip-course rushed recklessly
Until it poured into a sea
That restless churned and stirred;
A surging wild that caused distress,
Destruction, chaos, untold mess,
All from one trickling word.
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How blest are those, the Saviour said
Who guard the words the speak Ė instead
Of stirring strife, bring peace.
Into a maelstrom of distress
Their gentle answers soothe and bless
With healing loveís increase.


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Verna Cole Mitchell 05/15/14
This is a truly delightful poem with a wonderful analogy to bring out and important message.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/17/14
You have such an amazing gift. The words just flowed of the page. Comparing gossip to a brook is positively brilliant. It gives the reader an exact picture of how the words grow as they tumble down the slope, turning into something quite different. This is a powerful piece.
Ellen Carr 05/17/14
This is a powerful and graceful poem with a clear message. I like the way you've used the trickle-becomes-a-river as a simile for gossip. It works really well. Great writing!
Graham Insley 05/19/14
"And no-one then could trace the brook
That started in a hidden nook
Upon a far hillside."

I loved this choice of imagery. You have painted a wonderful picture of a great message.

Blessings.
Camille (C D) Swanson 05/19/14
Just really well done. I'm sure this will be one of the top choices for the judges.

Great job.

God bless~
Allison Egley 05/19/14
Oh, I like this. An apt comparison, and one I caught on to immediately, before you even "officially" introduced the topic. Nice job.
Lillian Rhoades 05/22/14
No surprise here. I knew it was a winner when I first read it. :-) Congratulations!!
Lisa Johnson 05/22/14
awesome and inspired... this is a very well deserved win for you...
Margaret Kearley 05/22/14
Wow - Thankyou SO much Judges. I wouldnt normally comment here except to thank everyone for their lovely and encouraging comments, but particularly to apologise for the missing 'y' on line 2 of the last verse!! (Should of course be 'they'!!)
Camille (C D) Swanson 05/22/14
Congrats! God bless~
Joe Moreland05/22/14
I am in complete awe of your ability to create poetry that not only is well structured, but great pacing and meaning. This truly rises to the level of "Art".

Congratulations!
Francy Judge 05/22/14
So glad I finally read this beautiful poem. Aside from the lovely imagery, the nice flow and rhythm, and symbolism, this had a great message. Congratulations!
Tracy Nunes 05/22/14
Such a well deserved win. Beautiful! Congratulations Margaret!
Pauline Carruthers 05/22/14
A beautiful beautiful poem. Right on topic and brilliantly written. Congratulations - a very worthy winner.
Ellen Carr 05/22/14
Congratulations, Margaret! This win was certainly well deserved, for your lovely poem.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/23/14
Congratulations on first in EC placing with this gorgeous poem.
Beth LaBuff 05/23/14
Wow! Masterful craftmanship! I wanted to re-read to catch every twist and turn and bask in the amazing force here. I love your gorgeous words and message. Many heartfelt congrats, Margaret. <3
Bea Edwards 05/25/14
A stunning and beautifully written reminder to guard our tongue. Many congratulations!
Bea Edwards 05/25/14
A stunning and beautifully written reminder to guard our tongue. Many congratulations!
Nancy Bucca05/26/14
Absolutely wonderful! I so enjoyed reading this. You totally nailed the topic. Congratulations on a well deserved first place EC!
Leola Ogle 05/28/14
Wonderful, Margaret! Congratulations on 1st place. God bless.