The Official Writing Challenge
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04/11/14
Ok, I had to google chicane. New word for me so you made me smarter for starters.

Then I was thinking of all those over dramatic scenes in movies where, in the midst of violence, there is time for the eyes-lips-eyes-lips...dive in for a dramatic mushy kiss before the bomb explodes. (while the boy was remembering his Bible stories) Whole time I was like...seriously he is in a near death experience... BAM...you hit me with the roller coaster trick.

Nice. :)
04/13/14
Wonderfully unexpected ending. I also enjoyed the integration of Elijah's story. Most definitely on topic. Great work.
04/13/14
Brilliant! You had me fooled - I was completely on the wrong tack till I got to your ending!! Greatly relieved I was wrong! Wonderful writing, great descriptions. I love the way you included Scriptural truth and the story of Elijah.
04/13/14
Panic swept over me as I could relate so much with Johnny. Being in a place where you have no control but to pray is heart stopping.

As I read this, I kept imagining a wild ride on the crazy highway from Tahoe to Reno. You had me fooled when learning this was a roller coaster ride. I don't like those either. Yet the funny part is Johnny obviously faced his fears and wanted to ride again. Oh my!
04/13/14
Okay, maybe it's a guy thing, but I had this pegged for a roller coaster ride from the first couple of sentences. I guess we're always looking for the next roller coaster. :)

The writing was seamless and the race through Johnny's mind for coming to grips with his fear was riveting. The whole piece felt like a roller coaster ride. What an excellent job you did of bringing to life such a tactile experience. This is an example of some excellent writing by a very experienced writer.
04/13/14
Okay, maybe it's a guy thing, but I had this pegged for a roller coaster ride from the first couple of sentences. I guess we're always looking for the next roller coaster. :)

The writing was seamless and the race through Johnny's mind for coming to grips with his fear was riveting. The whole piece felt like a roller coaster ride. What an excellent job you did of bringing to life such a tactile experience. This is an example of some excellent writing by a very experienced writer.
04/14/14
I usually don't read the comments before I write mine, but I couldnt' help but see the one above mine...and had to say "I knew it was a roller coaster ride too, and I'm not a guy! LOL." It must be from all of the roller coaster rides I went on as a child in Coney Island!

But, having said that. This was a well written story with a positive message thrown into the action that definitely was riding throughout this tale.

Great job.

God bless~
04/14/14
Oh my word-what a rip roaring ride!

You had me totally bamboozled. One of those 'really & no way' surprise finishes.

Loved it-thanks.

This exciting story is really well done--even to the lesson from Scripture. You nailed the suspense.
04/14/14
Great ride! I will admit I didn't see the roller coaster coming. I guess it was from all the dumb stunts I pulled in a vehicle when I was younger. Good writing!
04/16/14
Hair raising adventure! I don't think I'd have gone for the second spin though. I almost ripped the arm rests off my chair from gripping them so tightly. Good job.
04/17/14
Congrats!

God bless~