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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: End Times (02/27/14)

TITLE: Hoofbeats
By Kenn Allan
03/06/14


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Behold! A horseman in the mist
Upon a steed of mottled white;
Foretold in scriptures reminisced,
He rides in conquest o'er the night.

In sight of heaven, he is crowned
Thus is his sanctioned rule proclaimed;
But where shall accolades be found―
Among the blameless or the blamed?

Besieged! A second horseman comes
Awash with blood and searing flame;
His hoofbeats pound as beating drums
As he assails to kill and maim.

He bears a sword few dare to wield
And strikes the dove from stormy skies;
Forgotten passions long concealed
Unfurl with plans of cruel demise.

Begone! Another comes to pass―
His visage gaunt from hunger's blight;
With empty scales of burnished brass,
He rides on colors of the night.

Across the fields of harvests due,
He tramples bounty into dust
And spares the grain for but a few
Which thus reduces gold to rust.

Beware! Amid the dreadful scene,
A ghastly horseman rides alone;
In search of spirits still unclean,
He prods the dead with pallid bone.

The condemnation of his gaze
Burns deeply those he passes by
And in his wake, perdition's blaze
Takes heed of those ordained to die.

Believe! A final horseman comes―
His mount as white as virgin snow;
The darkness of the world succumbs
O'er His redemption long ago.

Ride swiftly with our righteous King,
Adorned in linen, clean and white;
Come praise His holy name and sing
And spurn the horsemen of the night!


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Toni Hammer 03/08/14
One of my favorite things about poetry--good poetry--is the omission of unnecessary words. With poetry, especially with such stellar rhyme and meter as this, every word choice is huge.

This was succinct and the imagery was great. Well done.
Lillian Rhoades 03/08/14
This was another classic. If it proved difficult, it certainly doesn't show. Horsemen were a part of my piece as well, but you portrayed them much more descriptively than I did.

I couldn't find any place to use my red pen. :-)
Judith Gayle Smith03/08/14
Exciting and beautifully written. I do like your poetry!
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/09/14
Awesome verse in meaning and meter. Your talent amazes me.
Beth LaBuff 03/10/14
This is the kind of poetry I love to read! That 5th Horseman, He's the One I want to be with when He comes. I love the contrast of the first four with the fifth. Excellent and amazing, as usual!
Camille (C D) Swanson 03/11/14
Beautiful job. The style reminds me of Shakespeare.

Loved it I'm quite sure the judges will too.

God bless~
Maura J. Merrigan03/11/14
Beautiful poetry from, yes the masters! Excellent read! Perfect tetrameter and rhyming patterns! I don't feel i should review a master category, but this was amazing! I did my first vilanelle ( in intermediate, please check it out!?) and it was tricky! Again, fabulous poem! Blessings!
Camille (C D) Swanson 03/13/14
Congrats! God Bless~
Margaret Kearley 03/13/14
Superb. Many congratulations
Beth LaBuff 03/13/14
Congrats, Kenn. I am NOT surprised at all! :)
Linda Goergen03/13/14
Congratulations Kenn! I can see why this won, it is so masterfully done!
Ellen Carr 03/13/14
Congratulations Kenn! Your wonderful poem is full of movement and carries the reader along with the dramatic events. Great Biblical imagery and a triumphant finish. Very well written and deserving of its 1st place win.
Bonnie Bowden 03/13/14
This powerful poem is masterly crafted. I'm going to mark it as one of my favorites.

Congratulations, Kenn, on your well deserved 1st place EC award.
Pauline Carruthers 03/14/14
I really loved this - Beautiful, excellent.A very very worthy win. Congratulations
Gracie Compere03/15/14
Congratulations! I loved this poem. Praise His Holy Name!
Sheldon Bass 03/15/14
Brilliantly done. I've been picking up some good lessons by reading your work. Congratulations on your first place win! Blessings.