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Very powerful and well written. Sad story well told.
You present an all to real situation.

Your story is touching and well written. It is so unfortunate that Greg choose the longer end of the stick.

Thanks for sharing.
I enjoyed your story. It perfectly captured the mind-set of a man just putting his time in church.

There are several sentences in which you have left out a word, like "in" or "the." Also, there was no need to mention that he was your husband of 29 years a second time.

These are small things and I don't mean to nit-pick. I just thought you might like to know.

I hope you do well.

This has impact. I like it. Great use of words!
Excellent work. Your entry was multi-layered and intricately woven with room to ponder and reflect.

Nicely done!

God bless~
Dang. That was an intense ending. I always appreciate the writers here that don't always tie everything up in pretty ribbons. Well done.

Just one small note, I believe you want to use "heard" in this sentence: "He thought he’d hear some rumbling earlier in the service."

Great, well told story. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Wow! What a powerful ending. This gave me chills. I almost died before I was saved. Then God decided to use me as a writer.

Terrific writing. Definitely a winner in my book.
Sobering in its descriptiveness and clarity, since we can't know how long we have. Great title as well.
Brilliant writing with a sad but bang on topic ending.
Wow, you had me captured from beginning to the sad end. I laughed at the beginning part. :) What a smack-hard ending. Very sobering.
You created a compelling twist at the end of your story.
One tinge of red-
I think you forgot the word 'the' before situation.
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