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02/20/14
We don't realize how hard some people have it, do we. Thanks for sharing this story.
02/20/14
This is so touching and thought provoking. As Americans we live such abundant lives that we sometimes forget what others are going through.

Well written and informative.

Thanks for sharing.
02/20/14
Fabulous storytelling. Thank you for shining a light on a group of people I often forget inhabit this big world.
02/24/14
Thank you for sharing this story with us. There are so many with stories such as these, my heart was moved greatly by your words.

God bless~
02/25/14
"Overwhelmed" is a heart-warming piece--a true story. Thank you for sharing it. I am going to take Psalm 107 for my medicine. The Lord is doing a work through your writing. Something is changing inside of me. Because of you, your willingness to listen to Norah, to help, to write now and share your story, my heart is becoming more tender, open to God. God bless you and your gift of writing. Keep at it. He is pouring and your cup is overflowing all over people you may never meet this side of Paradise.
Awesome story and such a needed message to remind us all of our many blessings!
This is a touching story. It brought tears to my eyes and I had no doubt that it was based on the truth even though I didn't notice the title until after. You really brought the emotions out and made me realize how hard it is to be a caretaker for someone so ill.

Instead of using taglines like she said, use that spot to show some body language for example: “I hope you have time because I have plenty on me.” She waved her hands as the sweat on her forehead beaded up. Also remember if you do use the taglines to use the proper punctuation (like in this case: me," she said. ( a comma after me and a lowercase s on she said.)Also when the same person is speaking, and you start a new paragraph, you use the beginning quotes to show it's the same person speaking. Sometimes it helps to break the monologue up a bit with narrative phrases.

You did an outstanding job of writing on topic. You nailed it and I would have easily guessed it had I not known. Your ending was perfect too. The line about hope brought tears to my eyes and made me stop and rethink my own circumstances. You really blessed me with your words.