The Official Writing Challenge
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02/15/14
I mean this in the nicest way possible... Man, that was an icky story. But the fact it left a bad taste in my mouth means you told the icky story very, very well.
02/16/14
Oh, this is good. I'm glad there was redemption, in multiple ways, at the end. Nice job with this.
02/18/14
Whoa! Very deep and dark story that thankfully, had a powerful message at the end.

Excellent writing!

GOd bless~
02/18/14
I'm overwhelmed by the dark side of this story.

You are creative and a good writer. Thanks for sharing.
02/19/14
Your opening sentence was a perfect "hook." You left some details for the reader to fill in, but sometimes that's a good thing. :-) The fourth paragraph raised a question as to whether the baby was the first to die of starvation, or the last because of the "would starve" rather than "starved" ;until I moved on to the next paragraph.

Your story was quite intense and vivid. Thank God it was fiction. ;-)
02/19/14
Your story was dark indeed but the redeeming sacrifice of Mrs. Cline gave it a fabulous ending. No dead end here!
Loved it.
02/20/14
I just re-read this and I found that I really, really enjoyed the ending. I love the fact that not all the ends were tied up and we're not sure what happened.
02/20/14
Wow what a powerful story. You had me shaking it felt so real. I was a bit confused when the other woman said sahe was a widow too. Did she kill her husband when she saw the note? You did a great job of bringing the characters to live. Your ending was powerful too. I can't imagine living in a time like that even though it still happens in different places around the world. Wow! Congratulations on ranking 10 in your level. Happy Dance!!