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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Light at the End of the Tunnel (01/23/14)

TITLE: The Best Part Of All
By CD Swanson
01/29/14


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"It feels as if I'm stuck in a tunnel and can't find my way out. The pain is off the charts, and this darn medication isn't doing a thing." She rolled her head back and forth as she cried.

I merely held her hand when I visited, there wasn't anything I could do at the moment...it wasn't her time yet. All I could do was let her feel my unconditional love and keep her company in silence.

Mrs. Brown was ninety-six, paralyzed from a recent stroke, in stage four stomach cancer and miserable. She had lost her vision to macular degeneration two years earlier. She'd lived a full life. She had volunteered at a local orphanage on her days off from working as a nurse until she became incapacitated.

Mrs. Brown was eighty years old when she entered the nursing home, but continued to shine her light every single day in so many ways. She was an endless joy to all she encountered.

She loved children, but never married. Although she never had the opportunity to be a mother per se, she was "everyone's mom.” Selfless, and overly kind to anyone, even the most recalcitrant individual; she'd find a way to touch their souls.

White tendrils framed her worn face, her clouded eyes blinked slowly before she asked, "How much longer must I stay here? Please, I want to go home..."

I squeezed her hand gently to give reassurance that I was with her, all the way. I felt her pain and it was difficult for me to watch, but it never got easier as time marched on. No matter what I witnessed. I had just come from a little child's bedside that lost her battle with cancer. I held her hand just as I was holding Mrs. Brown's hand. The family was in agony, and all I could do was offer my love as a means of comfort. My presence gave them the strength to get through it. My tears fell as I felt the family's pain as they cradled their six year old child. No, it never was easy. Two nights ago I was at the side of a young lady who had been side swiped by a drunken driver, she died as I held her hand…her family never made it in time to say goodbye. My heart broke for the family. It’s so difficult to watch, each time more painful than the last.

"I've done all I can on this earth. Oh help me now; I'm in so much pain. Please..."

I watched as the nurse came in and took her vitals, and adjusted her morphine drip, it was to no avail, and it wouldn't be too much longer. I held her hand and rubbed her arm that was bruised, contorted, and frozen. She was a good woman, and a great lady of faith. She was a special person and made quite a powerful difference in so many lives. The moment is here, now is the time...

"I feel your warmth and I actually see a brilliant light! Yes, I see You! My sweet Jesus—you've come for me—Hallelujah!"

I smiled as I welcomed her home. She turned to quickly look at her lifeless old body, and then hugged me tightly. This was the best part, welcoming my servants’ home, the very best part of all...


We are confident, I say, and willing rather to be absent from the body, and to be present with the Lord. (2 Corinthians 5:8 KJV)


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lynn gipson 01/30/14
You can't begin to know how much this awesome story means to me. I feel the same way about passing from my earthly life into the next. I look forward to that day, whenever and however, Jesus chooses to take me home.

This is utterly beautiful and if this doesn't win or place, I'll be bitterly disappointed. Unique and original and brilliant. Superb writing!
Dannie Hawley 01/30/14
You took my breath away as I moved deeper into this article. Tender, yet powerful. Gripping, yet freeing on other levels. You've done a great job of drawing us in, causing memories to surface of our own loved ones experiencing their final moments on this earthly journey, evoking emotions, and provoking thought. Isn't this what a writer hopes will happen when her work is read? Nice job!
Linda Goergen01/31/14
Wow, how powerful! We are so used to the pain and sorrow from the human perspective, as people neat death. But we seldom think of the pain it causes our Lord as He watches the pain suffered before we pass over to Him. What a great job you did showing that! This gave a multidimensional view of the topic and was just wonderfully written!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/01/14
This is beautiful. You did a marvelous job with the voice of Jesus. I could feel the love and the dialog was perfect. I went back and forth between the MC being Jesus and a hospice volunteer. You really did a splendid job with this. I also liked the unique take on the POV. While I suspect many will write about that light, your voice made it an out of the box story.
Pam Ford Davis 02/03/14
Such a tender story with a surprise ending. To God be the glory!

Wing His Words
Noel Mitaxa 02/05/14
You've encapsulated the science of nursing and infused it with the ministry and art of nursing as well. Powerful and transparently expressed. I hope it rates well.
lynn gipson 02/06/14
Congratulations on your EC! This deserves to win first place, but I am so happy for you. A truly inspirational story. Blessings girl!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/06/14
Congratulations! Happy Dance!
Danielle King 02/06/14
You took my breath away with your beautiful, tender, yet powerful story. It is a well deserved winner. Congratulations!
Dannie Hawley 02/06/14
Congrats on a well-deserved E.C.! I was just starting to give my cheering, shouting football fan voice a bit of a rest until the next celebration over Seattle's win at the Super Bowl, when I checked on the E.C. list. Indeed, it's like a brand-new wave of rejoicing has gripped me and my hands are clapping hard while my strained voice renews it's thundrous volume! Way to go girl!
Deborah Porter 02/06/14
Hi Camille. I couldn't comment before (after reading your entry), for obvious reasons, but have been waiting for the moment to do so. This entry ministered to me in a powerful way this week. We lost a precious treasure in our church on Monday after an 18 month battle with cancer. Because I know your background, and because I was reading this with the knowledge of who you are, I actually thought it was a true story from your experience. Then the ending grabbed my heart and brought tears to my eyes. Thank you so much for writing this particular entry, this particular week.
Beth LaBuff 02/06/14
This is excellent, powerful, and so well-written. I LOVED your beautiful ending. All I can think to say is, "Wow!" Congratulations on your Editor's Choice award!
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/07/14
This is a beautiful reminder of the hope of the Christian. Congratulations on the recognition. May many find encouragement in your words.
Francy Judge 02/10/14
Congratulations on this beautiful entry! I want to share this with my family because my aunt just died of cancer and was suffering. This opens our eyes to the reality that God is there with His children in the end, ready to bring them home.